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|books=[[Mistborn Era 1]]
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'''Kwaan's
After the [[Lord Ruler]] killed Kwaan, he kept the inscription as a reminder of his old life,{{wob ref|5764}} and it was eventually housed in the [[Conventical of Seran]]. After the [[Collapse]], [[Sazed]] discovered it when he visited the
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| "I am afraid, however, that all I have known - that my story - will be forgotten. I am afraid for the world that is to come. Afraid that '''my plans''' will fail. Afraid of a doom '''worse than''' the Deepness." {{epigraph ref|mb2|7}}
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|"I am afraid, however, that all I have known - that my story - will be forgotten. I am afraid for the world that is to come. Afraid that '''Alendi''' will fail. Afraid of a doom '''brought by''' the Deepness." {{book ref|
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|"I am also afraid, however, that all I have known - that my story - will be forgotten. I am afraid for the world that may come. Afraid '''because my plans failed'''. Afraid of a doom '''brought by''' the Deepness." {{book ref|mb2|41}}
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Ruin replaces "Alendi" with a gender neutral pronoun (translated here to "him") in order to encourage the idea that the prophesied hero isn't necessarily male.
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| "If only the Deepness hadn't come '''when it did''', providing a threat that drove men to desperation both in action and belief." {{epigraph ref|mb2|18}}
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| "If only the Deepness hadn't come, providing a threat that drove men to desperation both in action and belief." {{book ref|mb2|30}}
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Ruin removes the phrase "when it did," emphasizing the threat of the Deepness.
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Here, Ruin replaces the title Kwaan earned among the [[Worldbringers]] with the title that the [[Church of the Survivor]] chose for Sazed himself, to encourage Sazed to believe the prophecies, and to think himself and Vin part of them.
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| "I doubt that if Alendi reaches the Well of Ascension, he will take the power and then - in the name of the greater good - give it up." {{book ref|mb2|41}}
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Ruin obscures Kwaan's realization that giving up the power of the Well would do more harm than good.
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| "Rashek is to try and lead Alendi in the wrong direction, to discourage him or otherwise foil his quest. Alendi won't know that he has been deceived, '''that we've all been deceived, and he won't listen to me'''." {{epigraph ref|mb2|55}}<!--epilogue adds "dissuade him" before "discourage him"-->
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Here Ruin directly removes a portion of the text to hide the realization of some greater deception that is
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| "If Rashek fails to lead Alendi astray, then I have instructed the lad to kill '''Alendi'''." {{epigraph ref|mb2|56}}<!--epilogue says "lead the trek astray" instead-->
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| "Alendi must not reach the Well of Ascension''', for he must not be allowed to release the thing that is imprisoned there'''." {{epigraph ref|mb2|59}}
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