Editing Talk:Hesho

Hey hey, @[[User:Xnkvbo]], I wanted to suggest moving some of the paragraphs you put under 'Appearance and Personality' - they don't quite fit under that heading I don't think. 

I was thinking that;

This would work better under 'Attributes and Abilities', with maybe another subheading for "Ruler of the Kitsen" (or something about him being part of the government)? 
:"He spent most of his life preparing to become the monarch of his nation,{{book ref|sky2|26}} and that history very much shows in the way he and the kitsen around him behave. Even though he is officially just one member of a democratic government by the time he travels to the [[Superiority]]'s pilot recruitment program,{{book ref|sky2|13}} he is still treated quite specially and with great deference: he has an entourage of other kitsen who feed him,{{book ref|sky2|16}} fan him,{{book ref|sky2|17}} and drive him around,{{book ref|sky2|20}} all of which he accepts as his due. In spite of that, he seems to genuinely believe that it will be best for his people to move away from a monarchy, at least given the Superiority's rules on the matter, and he makes efforts accordingly to help the process along. For example, he tries to encourage Senator [[Aria]] to make a policy decision on her own, but she is confused and unable to come up with any ideas that don't involve just doing what he wants.{{book ref|sky2|26}}"

This would probably be better under 'Relationships' with a specific section for Spensa. 
:"After Hesho discovers that "[[Alanik]]" was actually the human [[Spensa]] all along, he becomes outraged and terrified and appears to be on the verge of shooting her. The members of his crew, however, talk him out of doing so -- the first seen instance of other kitsen going against his wishes in any way. Despite his kingly tendencies, he takes their desires into account and continues to work with Spensa, describing the experience of being overruled as "curious".{{book ref|sky2|39}}"

What do you think? 

[[User:LadyLameness|LadyLameness]] ([[User talk:LadyLameness|talk]]) 05:28, 1 July 2020 (UTC)

: Thanks for checking in! Hmm, so what I was trying to do was use those things as background evidence for describing his personality, but maybe it ended up being too much just saying what happened and not enough actually summarizing his personality itself. I think really what I want to get at in the personality section is how he obviously behaves like a super-pampered monarch most of the time, because he's used to it, ''but'' he also seems to be a wise leader who wants what's best for his people and it does look like he is, at least in some ways, trying to put aside his kingliness. (The thing with Spensa is a pretty big part of that, showing that he actually does listen to his people now when they have ideas, though it would also certainly be relevant in a Relationships section.) The other sections could definitely use more content; if you want to move stuff around to get started on them, as long as there's something left on personality and some kind of support for it (maybe with less detail than there is now), that's fine by me! --- [[User:Xnkvbo|Xnkvbo]] ([[User talk:Xnkvbo|talk]]) 18:31, 1 July 2020 (UTC)
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	: Thanks for checking in! Hmm, so what I was trying to do was use those things as background evidence for describing his personality, but maybe it ended up being too much just saying what happened and not enough actually summarizing his personality itself. I think really what I want to get at in the personality section is how he obviously behaves like a super-pampered monarch most of the time, because he's used to it, ''but'' he also seems to be a wise leader who wants what's best for his people and it does look like he is, at least in some ways, trying to put aside his kingliness. (The thing with Spensa is a pretty big part of that, showing that he actually does listen to his people now when they have ideas, though it would also certainly be relevant in a Relationships section.) The other sections could definitely use more content; if you want to move stuff around to get started on them, as long as there's something left on personality and some kind of support for it (maybe with less detail than there is now), that's fine by me! --- [[User:Xnkvbo\|Xnkvbo]] ([[User talk:Xnkvbo\|talk]]) 18:31, 1 July 2020 (UTC)		: Thanks for checking in! Hmm, so what I was trying to do was use those things as background evidence for describing his personality, but maybe it ended up being too much just saying what happened and not enough actually summarizing his personality itself. I think really what I want to get at in the personality section is how he obviously behaves like a super-pampered monarch most of the time, because he's used to it, ''but'' he also seems to be a wise leader who wants what's best for his people and it does look like he is, at least in some ways, trying to put aside his kingliness. (The thing with Spensa is a pretty big part of that, showing that he actually does listen to his people now when they have ideas, though it would also certainly be relevant in a Relationships section.) The other sections could definitely use more content; if you want to move stuff around to get started on them, as long as there's something left on personality and some kind of support for it (maybe with less detail than there is now), that's fine by me! --- [[User:Xnkvbo\|Xnkvbo]] ([[User talk:Xnkvbo\|talk]]) 18:31, 1 July 2020 (UTC)
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−	:Cool, cool I moved some stuff around and tried to tease out the personality traits you had in the paragraphs you wrote as a suggested alternative - please feel free to do what you want with it; change around, rewrite etc. You've done great things on the page, thank you for the work you've put in. :) [[User:LadyLameness\|LadyLameness]] ([[User talk:LadyLameness\|talk]]) 04:41, 2 July 2020 (UTC)